Storyboard First Draft

 

This is the first draft of my storyboard and I pitched this to my teacher, Mr Nick. He said it was good, but he has some feedback and suggestions. 

First, he suggested that I should add some reaction shots between shot 11 and 12 of co-workers inside the office, so it suggests the audiences to also feel confused.

 Second, he said that the phone in shot 23A can be misleading because it could make people think that it is a mobile game instead of a game from the Nintendo Switch console. So he advised to replace the phone with a nintendo switch or the TV. 

Next, 8 seconds of shot 8 was too long so he said it was okay to remove the narrative "Available now in stores and the nintendo shop" because it is already written down as text on the screen.

Lastly, he advised to make the advert a little shorter in time.